ext_188970 ([identity profile] jrosemary.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] elrhiarhodan 2010-09-27 02:02 am (UTC)

I agree with Damietta on this too:

I think the times that Neal's anklet is brought up in public (the classroom where Peter says "I wear a badge, he wears a tracking anklet") you can really see a whisper of emotion that passes over Neal's eyes (well done Matt).

Meanwhile, this is just excellent--I love how you convey the flash of bitterness from Neal as he explains that he'll never be an agent, and that being a CI isn't catching.

Despite what Blake thinks, though, I didn't get the impresion Blake really was the butt of a joke. I got the impression it was just an oversight--especially since Peter, Diana and Jones all think of Neal as part of the team (even if Peter and Diana remind him of the anklet.)

Anyway, great job!

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